4 sentence stories

This is a four sentence story that we had to improve upon. I learnt that a story is not about how long it is, but that it is about the quality of the sentence. I found this task moderately hard as it was kind of hard to find ways to improve my sentences. Luckily Mr Hornby had a slid that showed ways to improve.

My original 4 sentence story:

Water was getting drained by the coca-cola company in India. India was running out of clean water. India fired cannons on the coca-cola factory. The factory became a piece of history.

My expanded 4 sentence story:

The precious water of India's reserves was getting drained quickly by the horrible coca-cola factory that was close to the reserve. India was running out of the expensive clean water. Then the annoyed Indian government immediately contacted the missile company to fire missiles at the dreadful coca-cola factory. The factory became ruins, then it became a piece of Indian history.

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